The crew in The Odyssey should not have revolted because of the bad conditions they faced. The men volunteered for a mission. They should have known there were risks in any mission. While Locke believed in people’s right to revolution, the crew should follow orders like people in the army. Until they reached Ithaca the crew was obligated to follow Odysseus.
This part of my paper is the thesis.
I am proud of this section of my paper because I pretty much summarized the whole paper in one small paragraph. I also used the word obligated which is a pretty intelligent word to me. I remembered to underline and capitalize The Odyssey.
My entire paper can be found here: https://docs.google.com/document/pub?id=19Wfpv9AwDVTMLaHfpf0pAl51yG_qazQHVW9vpGOZWIE
What i planned in-class was the thesis and what my claim should be and that helped me because i was actually progressing my paper. The planning that i did out of class was, pretty much, everything else which helped because without all of that i would only have a thesis.
What i will keep the same for the humanities in-class final is probably the thesis. Since it is the best part of the entire paper.
For the humanities final i will change the evidence that supports the claim for all the body paragraphs, because i don't think those were very good. I will also add a conclusion because that might help my grade out a little. The final might require a conclusion to it unlike the humanities paper.
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